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[Galaxy Police Squad 4]

I like GPS Squad its really interesting, no matter how random it gets. I watched GPS ep's 1-3 so many times I cant fathom. Unfortunately ep4 wasnt that great at all.
The fact is that GPS is no longer in 2d, so your now under a entirely new set of "rules" to get the same effect. Major Laser is honestly the only person I can say that kept his "cool" from Gps3 to 4, attributed to fact that that is his character. 2:55 to 3:14 & 3:31 to 3:38 where the best seconds of the episode along with the shots @ 6:41 & @ 6:42 the rest of the episode felt flat due to the Framing and Especially Lack of Exaggeration. I'm not sure if you're familiar with the 12 rules of animation, but GPS3 used more of them.
I know first hand for how insane a 1 person project already is; It's challenging enough. Sadly I must say GPS4 looses the edge GPS series has had up until this point. If your gonna keep it in 3d they're are a few things that need to be done to bring back the edge it had b4 4 ...lol

1. MOST IMPORTANT PUSH YOUR ANIMATION, using squash and stretch, arching, & follow through techniques (12 rules of animation). I know your models can break if you push them too far but look at Toy Story, look at a the way Buzz moves, He doesn't physically deform but his gestures have weight to them, and his poses have "stretch" to them. Yes this based off Japanese animation but remember that was originally derived Disney animation. A lot of your animation killed your jokes in this ep, and made the delivery stale, your animation can make or break your work, which is why some people have said to revert back to 2d.

2. Frame your shots better. It was very weird to see 3:15 the guy is is plain sight in the center of the shot in a barren room with nothing to hide him in the slightest, what makes it more awkward is the fact that that person is not even in a corner or somewhere like he's TRYING to hide something; putting his crouching out of context...... and making him just THERE with a small arrow to point him out even further. Nothing about that shot "worked" It took away a lot more than it added.

3. Lighting, Effects, and Consistency. Even a random show like this has consistency, you need bring back all the Backgrounds and the "abusive" way you used them in GPS1 2 & 3. You also need to Light your characters to fit the mood. For example A Horror under-light or well placed effect Background would have been perfect for "you completely worthless heathens..." As well as when that dude shows up with the camera. that would have been a perfect moment for snapshot effect/flash . As for consistency, keep everything in 3d unless you need a 2d element, it was so odd to see the school as a 2d image and the hall way as a 2d image when they should have been in 3d. For that hallway shot @ 2:55 you could have rendered out a nice HD image then use the fish eye warp in Photoshop to get the same effect or Shoot it at dramatic angle, especially since every other location is in 3d.

4. Have Chibi models of needed characters so you can switch out at will. Check out the intro to Vocaloid Project Diva 2 those would fit quite nicely.

Well this is all a learning process anyway. I love that this continuing, and it cheers me up its just good. I love the energy, the vibrancy. And if you need any thing like a look over or some more suggestions or something I'm pretty much here to help just shoot a pm er what ever. Just Keep pushing for the stars. Fly away (lol) :)

Kel-chan responds:

thanks for all the good tips. I wish i could get photoshop to run on this computer but it doesnt work. I think i'm gonna use the 3d in a different way- mostly for something like storyboarding and camera angles etc and then use the regular 2D over that. I miss the livelyness of 2D and I dont think my computer has the ability to do 3D well. Also 2D kinda misses out on facial expressions and whatnot not

[EVo3: Finally Some Action]

"CREATIONISTS SHOULD NOT WATCH THIS FLASH" why would you say that? I'm a creationist and honestly there is really nothing there to offend "us" aside from your comment that is totally insulting. As if to say "we" have less than half a brain and "we" can't take things with a grain of salt. Its a fictional flash short, why would any one take it that seriously unless your intentionally trying to offend someone, sir Createtard. (EP1)

Now onto the more pressing matter, Your presentation.

Honestly this all audio. Nothing really happens. The entire thing can be just listened and were pretty much clear on exactly whats going on, the end is the only exception aside from that there is nothing really to be seen. I wondered things like why you didn't bother to animate the campfire and why certain things like the background of the ship and are just bland and boring to look at, while the characters just stand still while only there mouths seem to move.
Only person that seem to have any actions while talking was Xleek who seems to be a seriously boring version of Zim and half the time I was wondering when Grrrrr was going to pop out.
The jokes seem to fall flat the same typical slap stick you'd come to expect in a lot of these other flash cartoons, even further characters don't express pain anger or anything else aside from their lines. Then things aren't really animated most of it is a motion pose, that don't really convey anything coupled by the voice acting chalks up to "I'm just reading the lines" which yields into forgettable characters and an even more forgettable flash animation.

Next from your presentation is please fix your framing / set up your shots better and look at your timing
Xleek blends into the back ground when hes getting mad so most of a persons focus is on Brian since hes the one talking and his face doesn't clash with the BG and he seems to be pushing the rest of the cast off screen , so unless your forcing your eyes to try to see Xleek, no dice. Other parts were Brian's hand gets cut out of the shot cause both characters are oddly spaced on the screen, so there was no sense in him moving it since he's wearing black clothes in an already dark area, his gesture is like being cut off and once that scene is over you forget that he even moved his hand at all, or he even moved for that matter. I understand that all gestures aren't all that superduper important but if some one shakes there fist to sell a point thats something that you should frame correctly so that your viewers may be able note, so when they think back on that moment they can remember what he did, and lets not forget the kind of jestures a character makes defines him/her as the viewer sees them. Also some fames that need more time, you just flash some shots right before us and stuff need to sink in or comprehend is lost.

Next your Pallet is Ew.
Reason your main characters barely stand out from the world around them, when I'm not looking at the flash I cant even remember what they look like especially Xleek, his character is like the batman in a dark alley, and then you shoot your cast into an even darker setting. That turns from understandable to yellow lines every were, think about your choices in scenery and character colors before you make them.

LAST Story.
If you want this to be taken seriously you have to put lasting things into it. You can't expect the message your trying to tell to come across properly if every thing is the same tone all the time.
And you really give no incentive to keep watching.
Whats the Problem, IDK
Whats the Goal, IDK
Why are those 2 even on the ship, IDK
Oddly enough here is a survey fact, majority of people in around the globe believe in some form of creation over evolution, or a combo of the two. So why again are THOSE TWO really there?
It all most seems like a very poorly told conspiracy story with shallow characters, and nothing seems to stick and there is no presence of "The universe is bigger than we may think" at any point which is something you should have established already. Please fix.

vezanmatics responds:

REVIEW OF A REVIEW...REVIEWCEPTION

Wow, you just really had nothing nice to say about this flash, did you. If not, why didn't you just vote 0?

If you mentioned once that you were angry about the creationist jab, then proceeded to offer constructive criticism (ways i can improve this series, usually starting the sentence with 'you should') i would believe you.

But since you mentioned the creationist jab once, proceeded to say nothing but bad things about it, then mentioned it AGAIN and tried to justify your position with a bullshit statistic, I think you just wrote out this exhaustive (and extremely nit-picky) review because you were butthurt about that little remark.

Not everyone is an excellent director, or a colorist...my job is to grow as an artist and as a person, and to develop my characters and story so that I can earn a respectable name in the flash portal.

Answers to your 'unanswered' questions are on the previous episodes. Watch em.

Next time you review, offer some pros and suggestions, not just cons.

Oh, and for the record, there are more scientists in america named "Steve" who acknowledge evolution as a valid scientific theory than all the scientists in the world who don't. Thing is, our theory is backed by scientific observation and overwhelming evidence...your...HYPOTHESIS...is not science and never will be. It's just a conclusion that you're desperately trying to find evidence for.

CASE IN POINT: THIS IS WHY I INCLUDED THAT WARNING IN THE DESCRIPTION...HATERS GONNA HATE